Re: QUANTUMBOUND: by william paul 'sebake "flamingdinner"' baker-sepulveda

by **salty** August 21st 2016, 11:46 am

viubladan ul yangnos wrote:
Him. wrote:god damn youe trying so hard to try to make me look like the butthurt one
well bro you're the one who's spent three weeks trying to get me to dab despite repeatedly getting shut down so i think it's pretty obvious that you're not exactly the bastion of 'not butthurt' you wish you were lol

Hey, kid, can you dab? It's a real simple question, son. So simple, even, that I could ask it again. Hey son, we're looking for a dab, here, and you've got what it takes. But you just refuse, and that's the real crime here. The crime of the century.

And it's so true.

by **george lucas** August 21st 2016, 11:47 am

viubladan ul yangnos wrote:
keemstar wrote:thats probably cuz theres less arguing about stupid shite between people and junk from you

you seem to think there constantly needs to be new content brought up to talk about from outside sources when that isnt necessarily true
err spinny that's almost literally how forums work if there's nothing to discuss the forum slows down and eventually dies

as i see it ottd since the first one has been a place for a bunch of friends to fuck around for fun and friends don't need to look at the news all the time to get things to talk about unless they're old men in a gentleman's club

by **george lucas** August 21st 2016, 11:48 am

this isn't a subreddit devoted to a certain subject where usernames don't matter, we all know each other here

by **alyaza** August 21st 2016, 11:48 am

keemstar wrote:true

but you're obviously super pissed off

do you have any facts to back up that young assertion

and using lots of works like "spurrious"

hahaha oh my god that's a dumber argument than epoch's claim that because i type more than you do means i'm somehow mad what does me using 'spurious' prove aside from the fact that i'm verbose? 0/10 don't even try anymore

by **salty** August 21st 2016, 11:49 am

And it's real sad that RT is ignoring all of my posts. Because I'm saying a lot of good things; I make a lot of good points in my posts, and he just ignores them all. And it's so sad.

by **him** August 21st 2016, 11:50 am

because you're trying so hard to make it seem like someone else is mad when youre flipping shit over a joke

by **alyaza** August 21st 2016, 11:50 am

keemstar wrote:as i see it ottd since the first one has been a place for a bunch of friends to fuck around for fun and friends don't need to look at the news all the time to get things to talk about unless they're old men in a gentleman's club

at that point why not just exclusively move to skype? forums are intended to be like actual discussion venues and shit and that's not what you're going for at this point according to this post so it seems silly to bother using a medium that generally requires an inflow of outside content and people to maintain

by Mac B August 21st 2016, 11:51 am

by **Zilchexo** August 21st 2016, 11:52 am

hello it is i will sebake

can the OP please be edited out? It sucks badly enough that he apparently saved what I had written to my hard drive but hey looks like I was planning ahead when I started working on another document

If anyone legitimately wants it they can contact me on Steam

"subtlety is a key aspect you're lacking"

What Did He Mean By This?

by **george lucas** August 21st 2016, 11:52 am

viubladan ul yangnos wrote:
keemstar wrote:true

but you're obviously super pissed off
do you have any facts to back up that young assertion

and using lots of works like "spurrious"
hahaha oh my god that's a dumber argument than epoch's claim that because i type more than you do means i'm somehow mad what does me using 'spurious' prove aside from the fact that i'm verbose? 0/10 don't even try anymore

Don't even talk to me. You don't even use grammer, kid. Like, fuck off.

also, you're obsessed with "facts", like do you want me to go get an accredited scientist to do tests on you to see if you're mad?

by **alyaza** August 21st 2016, 11:52 am

Him. wrote:because you're trying so hard to make it seem like someone else is mad when youre flipping shit over a joke

that's a nice memer you got there but it doesn't reflect reality because all i really did was tell you 'no' and when you started escalating it to the point of it being straight up autistic i blocked you for being stupid and cut all ties

blocking you for being annoying isn't exactly 'flipping my shit' bro or else diseased blocking me also fits the bill

by **salty** August 21st 2016, 11:53 am

Him. wrote:because you're trying so hard to make it seem like someone else is mad when youre flipping shit over a joke

Very true. We just want you to dab, lad. And son, you're not giving the response we want, boy, so we keep asking. And one day, we will get that dab, kid. And we know it's true, young'n, because we've lived a lot longer. We have the experience to know that if you slap a youngster hard enough, they get the big picture. The real deal.

by **Zilchexo** August 21st 2016, 11:53 am

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by **alyaza** August 21st 2016, 11:54 am

keemstar wrote:also, you're obsessed with "facts",

are you actually unironically portraying the truth as a bad thing hahahaha oh my fucking god lmao

by **the 4th disciple** August 21st 2016, 11:55 am

by **Zilchexo** August 21st 2016, 11:55 am

wow i think this is the only time i've come here and not even remotely started a shitstorm but i guess that's because one was already going on it's an improvement i guess smrt

by **george lucas** August 21st 2016, 11:55 am

Flamdini wrote:hello it is i will sebake

can the OP please be edited out? It sucks badly enough that he apparently saved what I had written to my hard drive but hey looks like I was planning ahead when I started working on another document

If anyone legitimately wants it they can contact me on Steam

"subtlety is a key aspect you're lacking"

What Did He Mean By This?

i dunno why you thought it would be a good idea to share this with rt but youve probably learned what that leads to

we're deciding what to do

by Mac B August 21st 2016, 11:56 am

Flamdini wrote:hello it is i will sebake

can the OP please be edited out? It sucks badly enough that he apparently saved what I had written to my hard drive but hey looks like I was planning ahead when I started working on another document

If anyone legitimately wants it they can contact me on Steam

"subtlety is a key aspect you're lacking"

What Did He Mean By This?

try making it not obvious the protagonist is a devilist anthromorphic asian dragon in the first few chapters -- this is why we have exposition and though im sure the first few chapters are going to have striking contrasts from the meat of the novel this is nonetheless a crucial part of storytelling.
lack of subtlety causes an uninteresting and predictable plot. symbolism and literary devices are good for countering this

by **salty** August 21st 2016, 11:56 am

FD's avatar, now, I remember it used to be this little cartoon kid. Some angry, fat Spiderman lookin' character. So I changed it; now it's much better.

by **him** August 21st 2016, 11:57 am

viubladan ul yangnos wrote:
Him. wrote:because you're trying so hard to make it seem like someone else is mad when youre flipping shit over a joke
that's a nice memer you got there but it doesn't reflect reality because all i really did was tell you 'no' and when you started escalating it to the point of it being straight up autistic i blocked you for being stupid and cut all ties

blocking you for being annoying isn't exactly 'flipping my shit' bro or else diseased blocking me also fits the bill

it never escalated beyond us asking you to dab.
you're the one who blocked us all over it, and you're the one continuing to freak out over it right now.

by **george lucas** August 21st 2016, 11:57 am

would be cool if the dragon was an illusionist or shapeshifter because how tf do you go anywhere as a huge ass dragon with loud scales a huge tail horns ect

by **Zilchexo** August 21st 2016, 11:58 am

keemstar wrote:
Flamdini wrote:hello it is i will sebake

can the OP please be edited out? It sucks badly enough that he apparently saved what I had written to my hard drive but hey looks like I was planning ahead when I started working on another document

If anyone legitimately wants it they can contact me on Steam

"subtlety is a key aspect you're lacking"

What Did He Mean By This?
i dunno why you thought it would be a good idea to share this with rt but youve probably learned what that leads to

we're deciding what to do

thank

Brewmaster Mac wrote:
Flamdini wrote:hello it is i will sebake

can the OP please be edited out? It sucks badly enough that he apparently saved what I had written to my hard drive but hey looks like I was planning ahead when I started working on another document

If anyone legitimately wants it they can contact me on Steam

"subtlety is a key aspect you're lacking"

What Did He Mean By This?
try making it not obvious the protagonist is a devilist anthromorphic asian dragon in the first few chapters -- this is why we have exposition and though im sure the first few chapters are going to have striking contrasts from the meat of the novel this is nonetheless a crucial part of storytelling.
lack of subtlety causes an uninteresting and predictable plot. symbolism and literary devices are good for countering this

woah-oh i don't know what you're talking about familio that's not what i had in mind at all thanks for telling me though that's an issue i did not see. Thank you very much :)

by **him** August 21st 2016, 11:58 am

Flamdini wrote:wow i think this is the only time i've come here and not even remotely started a shitstorm but i guess that's because one was already going on it's an improvement i guess

because you're asking for something of yours to be taken down

by **salty** August 21st 2016, 11:58 am

Brewmaster Mac wrote:
Flamdini wrote:hello it is i will sebake

can the OP please be edited out? It sucks badly enough that he apparently saved what I had written to my hard drive but hey looks like I was planning ahead when I started working on another document

If anyone legitimately wants it they can contact me on Steam

"subtlety is a key aspect you're lacking"

What Did He Mean By This?
try making it not obvious the protagonist is a devilist anthromorphic asian dragon in the first few chapters -- this is why we have exposition and though im sure the first few chapters are going to have striking contrasts from the meat of the novel this is nonetheless a crucial part of storytelling.
lack of subtlety causes an uninteresting and predictable plot. symbolism and literary devices are good for countering this

I don't want to re-read it right now to give my thoughts, but I have a few criticisms for you, son.

Your story needs a major rewrite - only a second Marshall Plan can fix some of your war-torn book's gaping tropes. Because right now, lad, it reads like a Young Adult fiction novel, and that's no good for the real world. Keep the tense consistent, the dialogue unique, and the narration appropriate. That's the only way to survive in a world like this, and it's so true.

by **george lucas** August 21st 2016, 12:00 pm

oaky wrote:
Brewmaster Mac wrote:
Flamdini wrote:hello it is i will sebake

can the OP please be edited out? It sucks badly enough that he apparently saved what I had written to my hard drive but hey looks like I was planning ahead when I started working on another document

If anyone legitimately wants it they can contact me on Steam

"subtlety is a key aspect you're lacking"

What Did He Mean By This?
try making it not obvious the protagonist is a devilist anthromorphic asian dragon in the first few chapters -- this is why we have exposition and though im sure the first few chapters are going to have striking contrasts from the meat of the novel this is nonetheless a crucial part of storytelling.
lack of subtlety causes an uninteresting and predictable plot. symbolism and literary devices are good for countering this
I don't want to re-read it right now to give my thoughts, but I have a few criticisms for you, son.

Your story needs a major rewrite - only a second Marshall Plan can fix some of your war-torn book's gaping tropes. Because right now, lad, it reads like a Young Adult fiction novel, and that's no good for the real world. Keep the tense consistent, the dialogue unique, and the narration appropriate. That's the only way to survive in a world like this, and it's so true.

this post is legit advice

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